{"id":1276,"date":"2025-04-23T23:55:40","date_gmt":"2025-04-23T23:55:40","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/content.one.lumenlearning.com\/englishcomp1\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=1276"},"modified":"2025-07-25T15:49:26","modified_gmt":"2025-07-25T15:49:26","slug":"revising-fresh-take","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/content.one.lumenlearning.com\/englishcomp1\/chapter\/revising-fresh-take\/","title":{"raw":"Revising: Fresh Take","rendered":"Revising: Fresh Take"},"content":{"raw":"<section class=\"textbox learningGoals\" aria-label=\"Learning Goals\">\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><span data-sheets-root=\"1\">Explain revision techniques to improve a draft<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li><span data-sheets-root=\"1\">Describe techniques for effective peer review<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/section>\r\n<h2>Revising<\/h2>\r\n<section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">This video explains what revision is and some strategies you can use to revise your paper.\r\n<script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api \"><\/script>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/2OTdXuT6ZJ8?enablejsapi=1 \" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\r\n\r\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script type='text\/javascript' src='\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&cc_minimizable=1&cc_minimize_on_load=0&cc_multi_text_track=0&cc_overlay=1&cc_searchable=0&embed=ajax&mf=13492897&p3sdk_version=1.11.7&p=20361&player_type=youtube&plugin_skin=dark&target=3p-plugin-target-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8&vembed=0&video_id=2OTdXuT6ZJ8&video_target=tpm-plugin-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8'><\/script><\/p>\r\nYou can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/The+Writing+Process+-+Revision+%7C+Rhetoric+%26+Composition+%7C+Study+Hall_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cThe Writing Process: Revision | Rhetoric &amp; Composition | Study Hall\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a>\r\n\r\n<\/section><section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">The following video recommends doing three rounds of edits to fully revise an essay. In the first revision, you want to focus on the big picture and overall organization of the paper. In the second revision, focus on strengthening each paragraph, and in the third draft, review things at the sentence level.<script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api \"><\/script>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/ezI42BqJ4d4?enablejsapi=1 \" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\r\n\r\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script type='text\/javascript' src='\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&cc_minimizable=1&cc_minimize_on_load=0&cc_multi_text_track=0&cc_overlay=1&cc_searchable=0&embed=ajax&mf=13492905&p3sdk_version=1.11.7&p=20361&player_type=youtube&plugin_skin=dark&target=3p-plugin-target-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4&vembed=0&video_id=ezI42BqJ4d4&video_target=tpm-plugin-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4'><\/script><\/p>\r\nYou can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/Three-step+revision+process_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cThree-step revision process\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a>\r\n\r\n<\/section>\r\n<h2>Peer Review<\/h2>\r\n<section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">Some classes may require a peer review as part of an essay project. Even when not strictly required, though, peer review can be valuable for many reasons, as the video below explains.\r\n<script src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api \" type=\"text\/javascript\"><\/script>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/24apK7i32xg?enablejsapi=1 \" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\r\n\r\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script src=\"\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&amp;cc_minimizable=1&amp;cc_minimize_on_load=0&amp;cc_multi_text_track=0&amp;cc_overlay=1&amp;cc_searchable=0&amp;embed=ajax&amp;mf=13492895&amp;p3sdk_version=1.11.7&amp;p=20361&amp;player_type=youtube&amp;plugin_skin=dark&amp;target=3p-plugin-target-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg&amp;vembed=0&amp;video_id=24apK7i32xg&amp;video_target=tpm-plugin-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" type=\"text\/javascript\"><\/script><\/p>\r\nYou can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/Peer+Writing+Review+Process+%7C+Otis+College+of+Art+and+Design_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cPeer Writing Review Process | Otis College of Art and Design\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a>\r\n\r\nWho better to ask if your essay is meeting its goals than someone else working on the same task? Consider reaching out to a classmate to offer to exchange insights on drafts before the due date.\r\n\r\n<\/section><section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">This video explains what kinds of comments you should aim to provide when completing a peer review.\r\n<script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api \"><\/script>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-bafbabea-kMWZBDUlHUA\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/kMWZBDUlHUA?enablejsapi=1 \" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\r\n\r\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-bafbabea-kMWZBDUlHUA\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\r\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script type='text\/javascript' src='\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&cc_minimizable=1&cc_minimize_on_load=0&cc_multi_text_track=0&cc_overlay=1&cc_searchable=0&embed=ajax&mf=13492906&p3sdk_version=1.11.7&p=20361&player_type=youtube&plugin_skin=dark&target=3p-plugin-target-bafbabea-kMWZBDUlHUA&vembed=0&video_id=kMWZBDUlHUA&video_target=tpm-plugin-bafbabea-kMWZBDUlHUA'><\/script><\/p>\r\nYou can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/How+to+Write+Effective+Peer+Review+Comments_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cHow to Write Effective Peer Review Comments\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a>\r\n\r\n<\/section>","rendered":"<section class=\"textbox learningGoals\" aria-label=\"Learning Goals\">\n<ul>\n<li><span data-sheets-root=\"1\">Explain revision techniques to improve a draft<\/span><\/li>\n<li><span data-sheets-root=\"1\">Describe techniques for effective peer review<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/section>\n<h2>Revising<\/h2>\n<section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">This video explains what revision is and some strategies you can use to revise your paper.<br \/>\n<script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/2OTdXuT6ZJ8?enablejsapi=1\" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&#38;cc_minimizable=1&#38;cc_minimize_on_load=0&#38;cc_multi_text_track=0&#38;cc_overlay=1&#38;cc_searchable=0&#38;embed=ajax&#38;mf=13492897&#38;p3sdk_version=1.11.7&#38;p=20361&#38;player_type=youtube&#38;plugin_skin=dark&#38;target=3p-plugin-target-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8&#38;vembed=0&#38;video_id=2OTdXuT6ZJ8&#38;video_target=tpm-plugin-eceecbch-2OTdXuT6ZJ8\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p>You can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/The+Writing+Process+-+Revision+%7C+Rhetoric+%26+Composition+%7C+Study+Hall_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cThe Writing Process: Revision | Rhetoric &amp; Composition | Study Hall\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a><\/p>\n<\/section>\n<section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">The following video recommends doing three rounds of edits to fully revise an essay. In the first revision, you want to focus on the big picture and overall organization of the paper. In the second revision, focus on strengthening each paragraph, and in the third draft, review things at the sentence level.<script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/ezI42BqJ4d4?enablejsapi=1\" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script type=\"text\/javascript\" src=\"\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&#38;cc_minimizable=1&#38;cc_minimize_on_load=0&#38;cc_multi_text_track=0&#38;cc_overlay=1&#38;cc_searchable=0&#38;embed=ajax&#38;mf=13492905&#38;p3sdk_version=1.11.7&#38;p=20361&#38;player_type=youtube&#38;plugin_skin=dark&#38;target=3p-plugin-target-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4&#38;vembed=0&#38;video_id=ezI42BqJ4d4&#38;video_target=tpm-plugin-acbeccbf-ezI42BqJ4d4\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p>You can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/Three-step+revision+process_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cThree-step revision process\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a><\/p>\n<\/section>\n<h2>Peer Review<\/h2>\n<section class=\"textbox watchIt\" aria-label=\"Watch It\">Some classes may require a peer review as part of an essay project. Even when not strictly required, though, peer review can be valuable for many reasons, as the video below explains.<br \/>\n<script src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/iframe_api\" type=\"text\/javascript\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><iframe id=\"tpm-plugin-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" class=\"cc-media-iframe\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/24apK7i32xg?enablejsapi=1\" frameborder=\"0\" data-mce-fragment=\"1\"><\/iframe><\/p>\n<div id=\"3p-plugin-target-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" class=\"p3sdk-target\"><\/div>\n<p class=\"cc-media-iframe-container\"><script src=\"\/\/plugin.3playmedia.com\/ajax.js?cc=1&amp;cc_minimizable=1&amp;cc_minimize_on_load=0&amp;cc_multi_text_track=0&amp;cc_overlay=1&amp;cc_searchable=0&amp;embed=ajax&amp;mf=13492895&amp;p3sdk_version=1.11.7&amp;p=20361&amp;player_type=youtube&amp;plugin_skin=dark&amp;target=3p-plugin-target-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg&amp;vembed=0&amp;video_id=24apK7i32xg&amp;video_target=tpm-plugin-adcchaad-24apK7i32xg\" type=\"text\/javascript\"><\/script><\/p>\n<p>You can view the\u00a0<a href=\"https:\/\/course-building.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/English+Comp\/Transcripts\/Peer+Writing+Review+Process+%7C+Otis+College+of+Art+and+Design_transcript.txt\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">transcript for \u201cPeer Writing Review Process | Otis College of Art and Design\u201d here (opens in new window).<\/a><\/p>\n<p>Who better to ask if your essay is meeting its goals than someone else working on the same task? 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